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I wonder if you know
The moment we departed ways…
…was the moment of seeking path
I wander to know that you blow
The fragrant kiss full of peace…
…was encrypted with fires in the hearth
When bodies are lying, sleeping in beauty
This time is the time
To become a savant in the opera
Love the love and slow the dove
Dare the might and warm the night
Check my toes as the wind blows
Listen to these melodies on the mist; full of bliss
Draw with paints this face of Saints
Glance at these beautiful eyes twice
©mhsantosa (2010 – 2012)
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Kalau boleh saran, flow-nya Bli, flow-nya. Coba cek puisi2nya Mari Cayuso dan Pawan Hira deh. Mereka flow-nya bagus. Puisi saya, “Love is a Heart Throbbing Joyride” dan “Love is the Water of Life” juga bisa buat perbandingan.
Semoga bermanfaat dan terus semangat berkarya! 🙂
Subhan Zein
Makasi bny mas sarannya, gpp kok, itu proses.. sdh saya baca2, semoga nanti lbh baek lagi yaa.. 🙂
Ya, Bli, sama2 🙂 Saran terbaik saya adalah kalau ingin bisa menulis puisi2 bagus, maka lihat pujangga2 bagus seperti yang saya sebutkan di atas. Tapi kalau mau menulis puisi2 yang cemerlang, maka belajarlah dari pujangga2 yang cemerlang seperti Rabindranath Tagore, Kahlil Gibran, Pablo Neruda, Jalaluddin Rumi, dan Hafez Syirazi, Thomas Hardy, Emily Dickinson, WB Yeats.
Terus semangat Bli! 🙂
Subhan Zein
Siipp… Sy suka Tagore, Gibran, Disckinson, dan Yeats 🙂
Makasi mas.
Slm semangat!
Hery Santosa